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I was sitting silently on the edge of my bed. I stood up and watched out of the window, the wind
and rain was just crazy. Wind bending the trees to their braking point and rain just pouring down. All
of a suddenly all of it went quiet. I could only hear clock ticking. Click-Clack. And then blinding bright
light flashed over the sky. I was blinded by it and i turned away. Trying to get some sight back. I
rubbed my eyes and as i turned my head back up. Wind had broken one of the trees and it was
falling right into my window. My pupils dilated and i turned away. It all seemed to happen in slow
motion. I took to steps and i jumped out of the way. Tree came with such a force that it shattered
the windows of the entire floor. There were screaming and moaning.
When i opened my eyes it was morning, i was covered in shrapnel of the house. Tree had
demolished half of the wall. I stood up and swept myself clean. I noticed that my clock had stopped
working. I just thought it was because of a tree. I checked my wristwatch and it didn't work either. I
tried to boot up my computer but it didn't work either. I started to panic a little. It seemed the none
of the electric devices weren't working. I took my phone just in case, my knife and flashlight. I tried
to open the door but it was jammed, it was one of those electrical doors so why it should work when
everything else is down. So i tried to pull it open. Single stupid thing I've ever done. I pulled on the
handle and i broke. I slipped on the water soaked floor, almost felling out of the window. I pulled
myself up. I managed to break of a leg of the table. I tried to wedge open the door. No use. I looked
around and o saw a hatch in the ceiling. I took everything that i could find, made it to a pile and tried
to climb up. But it was locked. I climbed down and i almost gave up. Until i saw a hammer under the
rubble. I went to the door and started to beat the crap out of it. And amazingly it worked, door
opened. I stepped out, everything seemed strangely quiet. I had a feeling the something wast quite
right. I started running towards exit. I pushed open the door and there was really bight outside. I
looked around and there were no people. It seemed like everybody just vanished. Cars just stood in
the middle of the road peoples thing were laying around. I panicked and jumped into my car. At least
the car is working i thought to myself. I raced out of there, everywhere i looked there were empty
cars, building. There were nobody. I just drove and drove until i reached the Leaving Las Vegas sign. I
came out of the car and looked upon the city and it was empty. No people, no birds, no nothing. Just
emptiness. I got down on my knees and yelled „What is going on here". After a while i stood up i
hear something. Like a helicopter sound. I ran towards it. Over the hill and i stopped. What i saw i
couldn't believe it. I closed and opened my eyes again. There it was, a huge ship about 350 - 400
meters in length hovering over the dunes. The ship looked like a big bundle of spikes. But the thing
was, I have seen that ship before and i knew that that wasn't good, if they were here. So I stepped
back and i fell off the hill. I rumbled down the hill and got on my feet and rushed to my car. I drove
to the nearest gun shop i could find, broke the window and stepped inside. I grabbed guns: M4,
M16, .50 Cal Rifle, couple of shotguns and grenades, and a lot of ammo. I noticed that it had gone
dark, too dark for the time of the day, it almost felt like and eclipse. I tapped my watch couple of
times and it still didn't work. But that was impossible because it didn't run on electricity, it was a
special kind of watch. So i packed up all the things, threw them into the trunk and drove to nearest
building. I took my things and barricaded myself on the top floor. I had a clear overview of the
I was woken up by some sound, I opened my eyes and look out the window. I didn't see anything. I
got went out of the room to find some food. When i closed my door, there were some people
walking in the hallway. I panicked and aimed at one guy. „Who are you?" He looked me like i was
crazy man and answered „I'm the cleaner".
Cleaner: „Now just relax, put down the gun and lets talk.
Me: „What are you doing here, whats going on?"
Cleaner: „You're in a Hotel, no need to point guns"
Me: „Wha..
Security guards tackled me from behind and they hit me so hard that i passed out. I woke up in a
cell, my head hurt like somebody had hit it with a hammer. Could it be , could it be just a dream..i
wondered. A police officer came to me and said.
Police officer: „So you're the guy who randomly points guns huh? Do you even have a license to
Me: „No, whats going on here?"
Police officer: „Your were probably drunk and got that weapon somewhere and tried to kill a hotel
cleaner, that's what is going on here."
Could it just been my imagination, no, no that was too real. My past coming to hunt me.
Me: „No i wasn't drunk, i can explain..
I didn't even finish that sentence until a bomb exploded in police station. The shock wave blew me
against the wall and i lost consciousness. To be continued.
Ok this is a first chapter of my story.
Just started writing so dont be too hard..
Thought i love sci-fi so ill try to make some of my own.

I dont have a title yet, but its coming.
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opilthegreat Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
kigents Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well chapter 2 is out..
ThatGuyMurix Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Looking forward to the next part
novelist888 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2012
I am looking for writers, who are interested in science-fiction.
Methemac Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Interesting story. I'm curious to find out what happens next.

Supportive critique: I noticed that you are from Estonia. Is english your first language? There were a number of gramatical errors in the story. Grammer, for the most part, isn't crucial for a good, enjoyable story, but it can detract from the reading experience, or make it difficult to understand the story. Fortunately, it is also the easiest problem for a writer to fix.

I would be happy to take your piece and edit it, leaving comments on rules of english grammer for each edit i make. That way you can read my comments and improve your writing technique. If you think that would be helpful, let me know. I'll submit the edited version as a word document to your email.

Keep writing!
kigents Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, English isnt my first language. Yeah there are probably lots of grammar errors.

Sure it wouldnt hurt to correct errors.
Methemac Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I could tell simply because the errors made weren't the usual errors made by writers, more like the errors made by foreign speakers. I speak portuguese as a second language, so I remember well what that's like. Congrats on writing a story in a different language. That's way hard to do, so give yourself a pat on the back.

I'll do the edit as soon as I can.
senlienz Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Writing in a different language isn't hard. Writing in that language and not committing any mistakes, be they grammar or syntax, now THAT'S hard.

@kigents: I suggest you just open MSword (or any similar text editor with grammar check), copy/paste the whole thing and let it get the syntax done. As for grammar... well, English isn't my first language, but it's a matter of practice. Ask friends that DO have what language you're writing in to read it, just so they can point out any minor thing you might have missed.
I liked the text, though, it's easy to read. Keep it up.
Methemac Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
it can't display on my browser. Maybe submit your work as text, not as a file. I learned that the hard way. Then again I don't know. I'll check back later and see if its working.
kigents Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Now its text, hope you like it.:)
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